– Together in our magical world –
“Rocking”
We kinda rushed home from the soccer game and wolfed down supper. The kids were at a sleepover. Laundry whomped gently in the basement while I took a shower and he set up the hammock. There was a little motor he had devised, attached to a 12-volt battery, that kept it swaying even when preoccupied…with other activities. He was so mechanical and I loved that about him.
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Excellent story, it sounds so wonderful I wish it was not fiction and that it will continue! This is the type of closeness and connection that I hope can exist in real life also!
Just one minor style suggestion, some of the really short sentences interrupt the flow of the reading since they are so short that it makes it more choppy.
I do tend to use varied sentence length to set up a rhythm so not every sentence is the same cadence. I will re-read it more critically.
I like the varied sentence length, rhythm, and cadence. What I am referring to more specifically is only the handful of two word sentences like “The tug.” seems too abrupt when reading. But it is more of a minor preference that it was longer or combined somehow with the sentences surrounding it than anything that detracts from the wonderful story.
That is a very nice read. I like the portrayal of their feelings for each other. Sharing this experience never grows old.
Feelings create the connection 🙂
Well-written. Thank you for taking the time to write this. I really enjoyed it.
It’s a privilege to bring joy here. Planning for much more!
Sounds so lovely. What a connection to have. Great read.
Thank you 🙂
Treasure, you’re a gifted wordsmith. I look forward to more jewels.
So many in the chest! Hopefully they don’t all spill out at once!
Very good story. Looking forward to the next one!
More soon definitely. Thank you for reading!
This felt like a snip it of a romantic novel. Just a wonderful work of art. The description in the actions taken and the emotion expressed was truly a delight. Thank you for the share looking forward to the next adventure.
The emotions and touching bind couples together. The more I write about it, the more I hope people feel comfortable expressing. Thank you!
Oh Treasure Chest – happy tears are flowing as I read this, it touches me deeply. Thank you for putting into words what many of us long for.
I’m so honored by your enjoyment, thank you ❤
Well written, I love the way you convey the affection the characters have for each other!
There can never be too much affection 😊
Posted a picture for you on chat. Just what the doctor ordered.🤗
Treasure Chest, you transported me into the story. Your descriptions and attention to details had me immersed into the story. This was a beautiful story of love in the deepest form of connectedness. I hope to read more of your work!
What a blessing to read this lovely comment! I’m so glad it transported you. Yes, there is much more content on the way!
Oh, my… Loved the story and style… It felt like you were reading my mind and heart… I crave a partner and connection like this… please keep sharing. 💗
Thank you so much for taking the time to comment. Many more beautiful stories on the way!
The sensations and emotions that are so eloquently described here are the very reason I am so grateful to have found this site. The way that these two lovers accept and embrace each other is beautiful and inspiring. That connection is the foundation for all the excitement that is felt when reading the details of their interaction. Thank you for sharing your amazing writing!
I’m so glad you enjoyed it and could connect with the deeper elements of the story. Welcome to ABF Heaven!
No, it’s good fiction.
Wish I could meet a woman as loving as that.
I still adore coming back to this story time and time again. It’s great writing & the perfect blend of the routine of daily family life with the intensity of their connection & feelings for each other.
So glad you enjoyed this story more than once, your comment made my day 🙂